Friday, May 11, 2018

non chronological

This is my non chronological report 
                  The anamell  is a half dog and cat it eats candy and its shoes made of candy food and it likes to go to kfc to get food it does not like to play with kids or people it lives in candy land the price is 10000$ it name is hoppy the body is a box and it has a box head so it has a weird tall so it sleeps in a box on a roof and it went into the kfc and steeles it so it was happy because hop does not have any money to buy food so it smells the food to eat so it went to bed in a candy bed so it was about to go to sleep but then he heard something so he just went to bed so the next day he saw someone walked in to is candy land and when is walked he saw kids so hop was going to run away but he tells them to leave but the kids want to stay so the kids was going to say way are you here so hop was not going to talk so the kids left so he was going to block off the door so the kids won't get in again so the next day he went to kfc to sell some kfc but he was not going to steal but the police came and the police got him so the police said who are you but hop did not tell them so he called is friends to get me out off the car so one off is friends got him out off the car so hop went back to candyland so the cop did not no were was hop but then hop went  back to is room and he went to sleep so that was the end off hop.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Jacob. My name is Toby from Waikowhai Primary school.
    I really liked how you described Hop. While I was reading I imagined my cat morphed with a dog wearing shoes made out of candy! I can totally imagine my cat stealing KFC though. A bit of the story I didn't really get like how the kids got into candy land but the police couldn't. I would add more to this if I was you. Check out my blog at
    Blog ya later!


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